They said I would never make it. Determined to be the greatest. Said I wasn't real, but that's comin' from all the fuckin' fakest. They prosthetic, I got credit, look at all of my credentials. Dedicated my life, so I'm gon' prove that I got potential. They mental, to think that I would ever reach a deadline. Remember this loser when you see my name in the headlines. I'm just tryna shed some light, but you'll never hold a candle. To me, try on my shoes, let's see how much you can really handle. Tie 'em up, and lace 'em up, I wear a size eleven. Fuck your 9-5, I'm workin' 11-11. That's A.M. to A.M. and P.M. to P.M. The haters tried to blind me, I guess it worked, 'cause I can't see them. Out of sight, out of mind. I'm on a flight, I'm on my grind. I always shine, so fuck 'em all, I'm always gon' be gettin' mine. She's a dime, I'm talkin' 'bout this lovely lady, Music. She was always there, she had my back when I was 'bout to lose it. For all the trouble, I think I owe her somethin' in return. She gives me hope every day, I just gotta believe her. These suckas just don't see her, the way that I do. Paid the rent on my life just when I thought it was overdue. I'll never get over you. You'll always be in my heart. You'll be with me 'til the end, you was with me from the start. And I say this from my heart, you the only one I trust. Loved you right from birth, so you can trust that it was never lust. And the bond will never bust, matter fact, it's just beginnin'. Gotta succeed for you, so just remind me to keep on winnin'. I'm in this, for life, man, I'm never thinking twice. No second guesses, no lookin' back, not a doubt in my mind. Never lookin' behind, give a fuck about the past. Focused on my future from today until my very last. Put my fuckin' heart into it until I am heartless. Blowin' out my brain for this, and leavin' me so smart-less. You simply can't depart this, although I'm on a mission. Dedication shows, I always play my position. Never gonna lose, I have allergies to failure. Success is for the taking, I'm a greedy little taker. A Savior, I'm the only one who can set my life straight. Feast the fruits of labor, ayo homie, this is my plate. Music saved my life, I gotta show her some love. Always show my dedication, by rising up above. The odds, so homie, tell me, what are the odds? That I would take my throne, wear my gold crown, and sit among the Gods? A deity, I am preaching, this ain't divine intervention. Created masterpieces, take a look at all my inventions. Not to mention, I'm young, and I only got time to grow. I'll keep making my art until they call me Picasso. Until they call me Pablo, paint a picture of success. Yes, I am the greatest, won't settle for any less. Forget about all the rest, call it hater Alzheimers. They showin' major hate, but the effect on me is minor. Show me all your lighters, 'cause homie, I'm on fire. I am the shit like what you'd find up in your baby's diaper. I'm never gon' retire, it's holy matrimony. Music is my wife, now, I need a pastor, Tony. These suckas is bologna, I'm prime cut Filet Mignon. They spewin' out they bullshit, now it's time to get shit on. Climbin' up the steps, on the Stairway To Heaven. On my way to the high life, when I get there, I'll know, Led Zeppelin. Know I'm always reppin' what I love and support. Music always was my first, it was never a last resort. Don't bother tryna retort, don't bother tryin' to heckle me. My mind's already made up, I know that this is my destiny. This is the conclusion B, request you do not settle please. 'Cause this is only an episode in my fuckin' legacy.
Both your writing and flow showed great improvement here. The lyrics flow well and all relate to each other (crazy concept, isn't it?) Some of your previous efforts, while everything ryhmed, didn't really work to form an overall statement like this one did. Writing is basically having a starting point, figuring out where you want it to end up and making it finish strong, then breaking down how you are going to get it there. Your writing is showing great improvement in this area. It also seems way less forced, and I suspect this is just because writing/rapping is coming easier with more practice. You have mentioned before about doing your mixtape, my advice is just hold off a bit, and keep writing. Keep in mind that he more you write, the better they get, so don't rush to get something out just to have it. The longer you wait, write and practice, the better the end result will be.
Also, listen to "A children's story" by Slick Rick, then try to write a story rap.
these rhymes are recycled. sounds like '98 eminem...in a bad way. i keep waiting for "you gotta lose yourself in da music" to start up. it doesn't help that you're completely full of shit on most of your boasts and it shows. try harder.
WakeOfAshesPosts: 21,665destroyer of motherfuckers
these rhymes are recycled. sounds like '98 eminem...in a bad way. i keep waiting for "you gotta lose yourself in da music" to start up. it doesn't help that you're completely full of shit on most of your boasts and it shows. try harder.
I agree with this... a lot of your raps start out like
They said I would never make it. Determined to be the greatest. Said I wasn't real, but that's comin' from all the fuckin' fakest. They prosthetic, I got credit, look at all of my credentials.
But that is only shit you can really say when you make it. They said you'd never make it? Looks like they were right so far because you havent made it. That is the sort of shit you can say after you have a platinum record. go back to something more raw and more fucked up. Stop rapping about you and start rapping about twisted shit you want to do.
Lol aww, haters hating again, how lovely. None of my boasts are "bullshit" I don't write shit like that unless it's true and from the heart. You can get over your obsession too Satan. It's sad how you and Travis follow me.
Jobe, thanks a lot, I just read that. Good to know you legitimately think I'm getting better, that track is easily my personal favorite so far, and the one I'm most proud of.
WakeOfAshesPosts: 21,665destroyer of motherfuckers
dude... no hate involved. Instead of writing about yourself, focus on other shit, because you are a 15 year old little kid that hasnt done shit and hasnt gone through shit. I think you might actually have some talent to make it at this... but really you come off sounding a lot like Eminem in his later albums. If your gonna sound like Eminem then go back and emulate the content of his earlier work like the stuff on The Slim Shady LP.
What I (and I think Satan) was trying to say, is keep it real dude. Since you are so young, try picking topics that are controversial and not necessarily about how you are going places. Who gives a fuck where you are going? No one, until you already have a following and then people will.
Funny, 'cause I seem to have a lot of people who love those songs over at the Hip Hop forum, so it seems my target audience cares enough. I get major props over there, and a lot of people like me a lot as a Rapper, matter fact, I'm about to do another 3 way collab on there.
I agree with Wake completely, that's what I was trying to say a while ago in this thread when I said that it seems a lot of your songs have that "They thought I was nothing, but I proved them wrong, I'm on top of the world, fuck you" lol. Just, as Wake said, try to write more real stuff.
TUPAC IS DEAD/THE LEGEND IS GONE/THEY SAYIN TUPAC'S BACK?/DEM NIGGAS WRONG
He's talking about your success as a rapper. If you're making songs that people enjoy, awesome, but you haven't "made it" until you're selling a bunch of records and making a big name for yourself. Right now you're just starting.
TUPAC IS DEAD/THE LEGEND IS GONE/THEY SAYIN TUPAC'S BACK?/DEM NIGGAS WRONG
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From Those Fishes - I Fingered An Old Bitch (i got Aids on my finger)
What'd you think of Freaks And Geeks?
Episode 95 - Freaks And Geeks. (Remix.) by ErikBehemoth1357
Lyrics:
They said I would never make it.
Determined to be the greatest.
Said I wasn't real, but that's comin' from all the fuckin' fakest.
They prosthetic, I got credit, look at all of my credentials.
Dedicated my life, so I'm gon' prove that I got potential.
They mental, to think that I would ever reach a deadline.
Remember this loser when you see my name in the headlines.
I'm just tryna shed some light, but you'll never hold a candle.
To me, try on my shoes, let's see how much you can really handle.
Tie 'em up, and lace 'em up, I wear a size eleven.
Fuck your 9-5, I'm workin' 11-11.
That's A.M. to A.M. and P.M. to P.M.
The haters tried to blind me, I guess it worked, 'cause I can't see them.
Out of sight, out of mind.
I'm on a flight, I'm on my grind.
I always shine, so fuck 'em all, I'm always gon' be gettin' mine.
She's a dime, I'm talkin' 'bout this lovely lady, Music.
She was always there, she had my back when I was 'bout to lose it.
For all the trouble, I think I owe her somethin' in return.
She gives me hope every day, I just gotta believe her.
These suckas just don't see her, the way that I do.
Paid the rent on my life just when I thought it was overdue.
I'll never get over you.
You'll always be in my heart.
You'll be with me 'til the end, you was with me from the start.
And I say this from my heart, you the only one I trust.
Loved you right from birth, so you can trust that it was never lust.
And the bond will never bust, matter fact, it's just beginnin'.
Gotta succeed for you, so just remind me to keep on winnin'.
I'm in this, for life, man, I'm never thinking twice.
No second guesses, no lookin' back, not a doubt in my mind.
Never lookin' behind, give a fuck about the past.
Focused on my future from today until my very last.
Put my fuckin' heart into it until I am heartless.
Blowin' out my brain for this, and leavin' me so smart-less.
You simply can't depart this, although I'm on a mission.
Dedication shows, I always play my position.
Never gonna lose, I have allergies to failure.
Success is for the taking, I'm a greedy little taker.
A Savior, I'm the only one who can set my life straight.
Feast the fruits of labor, ayo homie, this is my plate.
Music saved my life, I gotta show her some love.
Always show my dedication, by rising up above.
The odds, so homie, tell me, what are the odds?
That I would take my throne, wear my gold crown, and sit among the Gods?
A deity, I am preaching, this ain't divine intervention.
Created masterpieces, take a look at all my inventions.
Not to mention, I'm young, and I only got time to grow.
I'll keep making my art until they call me Picasso.
Until they call me Pablo, paint a picture of success.
Yes, I am the greatest, won't settle for any less.
Forget about all the rest, call it hater Alzheimers.
They showin' major hate, but the effect on me is minor.
Show me all your lighters, 'cause homie, I'm on fire.
I am the shit like what you'd find up in your baby's diaper.
I'm never gon' retire, it's holy matrimony.
Music is my wife, now, I need a pastor, Tony.
These suckas is bologna, I'm prime cut Filet Mignon.
They spewin' out they bullshit, now it's time to get shit on.
Climbin' up the steps, on the Stairway To Heaven.
On my way to the high life, when I get there, I'll know, Led Zeppelin.
Know I'm always reppin' what I love and support.
Music always was my first, it was never a last resort.
Don't bother tryna retort, don't bother tryin' to heckle me.
My mind's already made up, I know that this is my destiny.
This is the conclusion B, request you do not settle please.
'Cause this is only an episode in my fuckin' legacy.
Also, listen to "A children's story" by Slick Rick, then try to write a story rap.
They said I would never make it.
Determined to be the greatest.
Said I wasn't real, but that's comin' from all the fuckin' fakest.
They prosthetic, I got credit, look at all of my credentials.
But that is only shit you can really say when you make it. They said you'd never make it? Looks like they were right so far because you havent made it. That is the sort of shit you can say after you have a platinum record. go back to something more raw and more fucked up. Stop rapping about you and start rapping about twisted shit you want to do.
Jobe, thanks a lot, I just read that. Good to know you legitimately think I'm getting better, that track is easily my personal favorite so far, and the one I'm most proud of.
What I (and I think Satan) was trying to say, is keep it real dude. Since you are so young, try picking topics that are controversial and not necessarily about how you are going places. Who gives a fuck where you are going? No one, until you already have a following and then people will.
He's talking about your success as a rapper. If you're making songs that people enjoy, awesome, but you haven't "made it" until you're selling a bunch of records and making a big name for yourself. Right now you're just starting.