Because I'm 'sposed to be perfect on my second ever Rap song, makes sense.
Anyways, thank you everyone else.
Would you rather me blow smoke up your ass like a dick rider Or give some criticism to make your shit tighter? Song is ok but the genre is wrong Its structured more like a metal song Rap is more influenced by clever word play And similes and metaphors are needed all day these are all tips to help you get better But of you choose to get pissy then whatever If I was dissing you you'd fucking know it Peep the knowledge and if you reap it you can sow it
Jobe.
Are you serious? Riding the dick of one decent- ass lyricist? You keep talking about how this guys lacking flow, similes, and metaphors like it's a fucking kid's show. Rap comes from the heart, Niggas'll say what they wanna say, It is not like they're trying to pass an English class all day You say you're as high as a kite, Erik's a skyscraper, And at least his words sound good when they're not on paper. Word, try a little harder next time, maybe you'll do good, instead of sounding like some dumbass faggot who wishes he could. True story.
Because I'm 'sposed to be perfect on my second ever Rap song, makes sense.
Anyways, thank you everyone else.
Would you rather me blow smoke up your ass like a dick rider Or give some criticism to make your shit tighter? Song is ok but the genre is wrong Its structured more like a metal song Rap is more influenced by clever word play And similes and metaphors are needed all day these are all tips to help you get better But of you choose to get pissy then whatever If I was dissing you you'd fucking know it Peep the knowledge and if you reap it you can sow it
Jobe.
Are you serious? Riding the dick of one decent- ass lyricist? You keep talking about how this guys lacking flow, similes, and metaphors like it's a fucking kid's show. Rap comes from the heart, Niggas'll say what they wanna say, It is not like they're trying to pass an English class all day You say you're as high as a kite, Erik's a skyscraper, And at least his words sound good when they're not on paper. Word, try a little harder next time, maybe you'll do good, instead of sounding like some dumbass faggot who wishes he could. True story.
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Edit: The song was actually pretty cool
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Are you serious?
Riding the dick of one decent- ass lyricist?
You keep talking about how this guys lacking flow,
similes, and metaphors like it's a fucking kid's show.
Rap comes from the heart, Niggas'll say what they wanna say,
It is not like they're trying to pass an English class all day
You say you're as high as a kite, Erik's a skyscraper,
And at least his words sound good when they're not on paper.
Word, try a little harder next time, maybe you'll do good,
instead of sounding like some dumbass faggot who wishes he could.
True story.
OHHHHHH SHITTT NIGGUH!
*Brofist.*
And don't worry Jobe, threw some similes and metaphors in there for you.
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From Those Fishes - I Fingered An Old Bitch (i got Aids on my finger)
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From Those Fishes - I Fingered An Old Bitch (i got Aids on my finger)