I've been writing a lot of lyrics over the last couple months, working on a 6 song EP. Don't have much music for it, but lyrics are almost finished.
Just kinda want to talk lyrics/writing with someone, maybe get an opinion on something I wrote. No one around here really pays attention to the lyrics.
I've been writing a lot of lyrics over the last couple months, working on a 6 song EP. Don't have much music for it, but lyrics are almost finished.
Just kinda want to talk lyrics/writing with someone, maybe get an opinion on something I wrote. No one around here really pays attention to the lyrics.
Okay, The concept behind the EP I've been writing isn't necessarily anything unheard of, but I wanted to take it in a slightly different direction than what I've seen other bands do. All of it is also just from personal experience. I've never been good at writing stores, or fantasy based lyrics.
It's like watching someone you love or care about, whether it be a friend, or family go through life dealing with depression, suicidal thoughts, addiction (etc), but without being able to do anything except watch it happen. It's not something anyone ever wants to admit or accept, they'd want to try to help the person(s), but sometimes people just have to help themselves first.
The flow of the lyrics may seem odd at times, but it's done on purpose. -
"You were bewildered and electrified, a witness to the crime scene. A robbery of closure, a face so unfamiliar. Like a ghost you dreamt you once knew, under any other circumstance. To reconvene the salvage, beneath the rubble you lay as you prayed.
An answer so conspicuous, yet they never seem to grasp and take note.
Now you lay here beside yourself, tears streaming down onto the floor. In an isolated state of mind, with an uncertainty creeping over. Exhausted and overwhelmed, with a sense of abandonment. Succumbing to their misconception, wishing for it to all just fade way.
I can see the pain, the tears they've caused, when all you've ever wanted was a showing of love. Never to beg, or to hope for anything. Trapped inside an image that isn't your own, haunted by the things that you aren't. You drift off to sleep, as your mind ponders over to nothingness.
--Instrumental interlude--
I awoke the morning of the fifth, a Wednesday, it's been a year since I last heard your voice. I sit here in dread filled with remorse and a memory, with a half written letter and a picture of you. In absence of what meant most to me one time, I can't help but wonder what could have been, what will never be.
(Would it have meant anything to tell you I'm sorry?)
You are everything, everything they will never know." ---
It's probably self explanatory, but it's about someone watching a friend/relative deal with depression, which ultimately leads to suicide. The second half of the song is the person a year later, feeling guilt/remorse for either not doing, or being able to do anything.
I feel like your concept isn't hashed out enough. Is this a one song EP? Because I feel like you just covered your entire concept in one song. How are the other songs going to differ from this one, what stories will they tell? Your listeners/readers are going to get bored if every song is about the same idea.
WakeOfAshesPosts: 21,665destroyer of motherfuckers
yeah idk... seems like it needs a little work. But if it is something that is personal to you, then it will come out sounding a lot better than it would of otherwise.
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Im assuming so. I wasnt on duty after 9
Wasn't really expecting anyone to read them.
Okay, The concept behind the EP I've been writing isn't necessarily anything unheard of, but I wanted to take it in a slightly different direction than what I've seen other bands do. All of it is also just from personal experience. I've never been good at writing stores, or fantasy based lyrics.
It's like watching someone you love or care about, whether it be a friend, or family go through life dealing with depression, suicidal thoughts, addiction (etc), but without being able to do anything except watch it happen. It's not something anyone ever wants to admit or accept, they'd want to try to help the person(s), but sometimes people just have to help themselves first.
The flow of the lyrics may seem odd at times, but it's done on purpose.
-
"You were bewildered and electrified, a witness to the crime scene. A robbery of closure, a face so unfamiliar. Like a ghost you dreamt you once knew, under any other circumstance. To reconvene the salvage, beneath the rubble you lay as you prayed.
---
It's probably self explanatory, but it's about someone watching a friend/relative deal with depression, which ultimately leads to suicide. The second half of the song is the person a year later, feeling guilt/remorse for either not doing, or being able to do anything.
:-?