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GULCH_OF_ROT
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PLEASE LET ME KNOW IF IT MAKES YOU WANT TO HIRE ME AS A CAD MANAGER
Hello Mr. Antone, thank you for taking the time to meet with me today. My name is Kevin Joseph Clarke and I can’t wait to get started as your new CAD Manager. I currently hold the position of CAD Operator at Newcomer-Lee Land surveying based out of Wailuku Maui. For the past five years I have worked diligently on the implementation of CAD standards and procedures, witch have greatly increased the company’s efficiency. I oversee every aspect of our CAD department’s projects on a daily basis and am ready to take on more changing projects in a management position.
Before my time at Newcomer-Lee, I was working for Advanced Automation Engineering designing smart homes, as a CAD Operator in San Jose California, while attending a wide range of CAD courses at De Anza Community College. At AAE I played a instrumental role in the company’s transition to all digital drawing, along with implementation of CAD Standards.
Previous to my time at AAE I held a position at T.R.C. Landscaping as Draftsman. I was hired on to assist in their upgrade from hand drawn maps to digital maps. I was only with TRC for half a year but in that short time I got there drafting department transformed into a much more efficient CAD department. Once again I implemented CAD standards and refined drafting procedures.
I have been an active member of A.U.G.I. and attend their annual meeting here in Hawaii. I received my A.S. degree in drafting technologies in 2001 from Truckee Meadows Community College in Reno Nevada and I am continuing my education in pursuit of a bachelor in Civil Engineering. I also attended many CAD and CAD related vocational training courses offered by Viatech here on the Maui College campus.
I am highly self-motivated and an excellent communicator. I know that I will be a great asset to your CAD department and AutoDesk as a whole. I look forward to a profitable and mutually beneficial future here at AutoDesk. Are there any questions or would you like me to elaborate on any of my education and/or work history?
Hello Mr. Antone, thank you for taking the time to meet with me today. My name is Kevin Joseph Clarke and I can’t wait to get started as your new CAD Manager. I currently hold the position of CAD Operator at Newcomer-Lee Land surveying based out of Wailuku Maui. For the past five years I have worked diligently on the implementation of CAD standards and procedures, witch have greatly increased the company’s efficiency. I oversee every aspect of our CAD department’s projects on a daily basis and am ready to take on more changing projects in a management position.
Before my time at Newcomer-Lee, I was working for Advanced Automation Engineering designing smart homes, as a CAD Operator in San Jose California, while attending a wide range of CAD courses at De Anza Community College. At AAE I played a instrumental role in the company’s transition to all digital drawing, along with implementation of CAD Standards.
Previous to my time at AAE I held a position at T.R.C. Landscaping as Draftsman. I was hired on to assist in their upgrade from hand drawn maps to digital maps. I was only with TRC for half a year but in that short time I got there drafting department transformed into a much more efficient CAD department. Once again I implemented CAD standards and refined drafting procedures.
I have been an active member of A.U.G.I. and attend their annual meeting here in Hawaii. I received my A.S. degree in drafting technologies in 2001 from Truckee Meadows Community College in Reno Nevada and I am continuing my education in pursuit of a bachelor in Civil Engineering. I also attended many CAD and CAD related vocational training courses offered by Viatech here on the Maui College campus.
I am highly self-motivated and an excellent communicator. I know that I will be a great asset to your CAD department and AutoDesk as a whole. I look forward to a profitable and mutually beneficial future here at AutoDesk. Are there any questions or would you like me to elaborate on any of my education and/or work history?
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I WOULD BUT I HAVE TO TURN IN MY SPEECH AFTER I GIVE IT IN FRONT OF CLASS AND I WILL GET DOCKED POINTS FOR GRAMMAR :-(
1. You have no obvious direction in the letter, and it doesn't seem as if you have any real reason to be writing him other then trying to give him some bs interview follow up letter.
2. There is no structure. it is just kinda reads and a bunch on words strung together. If I was writing this sort of letter, I would probably make the structure be something like (each roman numeral is a different paragraph.)
I. Introduction and make it clear you are going to talk about II. III. IV.
II. Work experience related to position
III. Ideas you have for improving their product line
IV. Ideas you have for managing employees
V. Conclude it up.
The idea of those type of letters is to really sell yourself and get across to the hiring manager why he needs you as opposed to the other hundred chumps that applied for the job. Your letter fails at that.
I HAVE GOTTEN EVERY JOB I EVER INTERVIEWED FOR, SO I GUESS I HAVE A KNACK FOR NAILING INTERVIEWS AS YOU PUT IT
BUSINESS COMMUNICATION 131 CLASS
I FEEL THAT THIS CLASS IS A JOKE FTR BUT I STILL WANT MY A+
BRING ON THE CONSTRUCTIVE POINTERS
I wasnt saying anything personal about you or your ability to interview. I just felt the speech didnt really drive home the point you were trying to make with the letter. I think you could do better basically.
THE CLASS HAS NOTHING TO DO WITH LETTER WRITING.
THE FOCUS OF THE SPEECH IS ON NON VERBAL COMMUNICATION I AM LIMITED TO 2 MINUTES.
THE OFFICIAL TITLE OF MY SO CALLED LETTER IS SPEECH OUTLINE
THERE IS A VERY STRONG OVERALL MESSAGE - I AM THE BEST CANDIDATE FOR CAD MANAGER POSITION
OH YEAH AND THE WHOLE THING IS MAKE PRETEND BUT WE NEEDED TO USE A REAL COMPANY
EXCEPT I HAVE TO TURN IN MY SPEECH OUTLINE
HOW DO YOU SUGGEST I DRIVE HOME THE POINT?
HELP ME ASHES
I wanted to thank you for taking the time out of your busy schedule to interview me for the position of CAD manager. It was an honor and a pleasure to meet someone that has been so instrumental at making Antone Industries one of the leaders in CAD development. I understand that the appointment of your next CAD manager is an important decision and I thought it might be helpful if I summarized my work experience, ideas I have for improving Antone Industries products, and how I feel my management of the employees will help improve Antone Industries quarterly results.
Currently I hold the CAD operator position at Newcomer-Lee Land surveying based out of Wailuku Maui. For the past ten years I have worked diligently on the implementation of CAD standards and procedures, which have greatly increased the company’s efficiency and saved an estimated 13.2 million dollars from their yearly operational expenses. I had 18 direct reports, and though my Industry contacts I was able to bring in 130 million of new revenue and keep my direct reports busy without any gaps between contracts. Prior to my time at AAE, I held a position at T.R.C. Landscaping as Draftsman. I was hired on to assist in their upgrade from hand drawn maps to digital maps. I was only with TRC for half a year, but in that short time I transformed their drafting department into a much more efficient CAD department by refining drafting procedures.
Although Antone Industries is a leader in CAD development, I believe there are many areas where I can make an immediate impact. The policies and procedures that I implemented in Newcomer-Lee and T.R.C are very applicable. These policies help insure structure to the designs, while being able to automatically leverage previous designs and tools. I see no reason why a CAD engineer must 'redesign the wheel' every time he starts a new project. Implementation of my policies and procedures will most certainly save the company 30% of their GDP when fully utilized.
My management style is one of encouragement. I believe in treating my employees with the respect that I expect them to treat me. My door is always open and I enjoy fostering creativity and competition for new and exciting projects. If your employees are excited about coming to work, the output of their efforts will be some of the industry best.
The quality of questions I received during the interview was a real testament to your team and the attention to detail they provide to their work. I enjoyed discussing some of the challenging problems they presented, yet was humbled by their dedication to the job. I believe that with my management style and experience I have with optimizing a CAD department, that we can take Antone Industries to new heights. I look forward to discussing with you further ways that we can add to the success of Antone Industries
Sincerely,
Gultch
AND IF I MEMORIZE THIS IT WILL BE OVER 2 MINUTES
I AGREE THAT I SHOULD PUT MORE EMPASIS ON MANAGMENT STYLE AND TECHNIQUE
KEEP IN MIND THIS COURSE IS ABOUT SPEAKING NOT WRITING
MY FELLOW CLASS MATES ARE APPLYING FOR JOBS LIKE WAITRESS, KINDERGARTEN TEACHER, ZUMBA INSTRUCTOR, BAGAGE HANDLER, NO ONE IN MY CLASS IS GOING FOR ANYTHING PROFESSIONAL.
THIS IS A ENTRY LEVEL COM CLASS AT A COMMUNITY COLLEGE ON MAUI
CANT THANK YOU ENOUGH FOR YOUR EVALUATION BUT UNDERSTAND IT WILL BE MY PRESENCE MORE SO THEN INFORMATION I CONVEY THAT I AM GRADED ON