Mayhem Festival Poem I wrote for english class

MarcusM

I LIKE IT BUT IT IS KINDA LONG

OPP

After the show, we're all pumped out of juice.
My neck is stiff, and my arms are loose.

these two lines concern me...

lol

Santana

Surprised your teacher said that lol

I liked it a lot! \m/

Razor_Shark

Dude, just had an idea, when we are all in Detroit we should record this, like a rap, or something.

Heisenberg

'After Rob Zombie destroys the stage, this is my thesis:
Korn won't be able to pick up the pieces"


=D>

sbs_will

Haha, thanks guys.

'After Rob Zombie destroys the stage, this is my thesis:
Korn won't be able to pick up the pieces"


=D>

Yeah, I thought that part was pretty clever. I actually sent that to my facebook page before Korn took the stage.

Dude, just had an idea, when we are all in Detroit we should record this, like a rap, or something.

no

its kinda long but other then that its good. i lol at the wayne static and dayna part

Haha yeah :-)













I kinda wanna make that a rap next.......Maybe that can be my second Phat Beat song, only it would be more of a nu metal song.

Brian

Lol @ dissing Korn in a nu metal song.

Stoned_Catz

d00d first: summer summer summer dont y00z know how to use a Thesaurus? -10 on peotry so far

sbs_will

d00d first: summer summer summer dont y00z know how to use a Thesaurus? -10 on peotry so far

Minus 10 on misspelling poetry.

Lol @ dissing Korn in a nu metal song.

Wow, I didn't even realize that haha

Stoned_Catz

um tellin y00z d00d yooz teacher is gonna fukkinz burn y00z on the summer word being used wifout consideration of synonymz, try like DOG DAYS, or, Solstice,

Brian

Or pretty vacation of sunshine happiness.

Stoned_Catz

its a pretty good poem, Im just sayinz when creative writing synonyms is a rule of thumb

Heisenberg

'After Rob Zombie destroys the stage, this is my thesis:
Korn won't be able to pick up the pieces"


=D>

Some Dr Seuse shit right ther

FLAT

I like it.